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8月28日雅思大作文示範寫作 | 上大學之前，我可以休假一年嗎？

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本期作者：劉靜

2021年8月28雅思大作文題目

School leavers go travelling or work before they go directly to the university.

Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages on their study?

本周的考題是劍橋5上的一道真題，雖然問法不完全一緻，但參考範文也完全可以回應今天這道題目。本期，我們就來分析一下考官範文。

範文

Introduction

It is quite common these days for young people in many countries to have a break from studying after graduating from high school. The trend is not restricted to rich students who have the money to travel, but is also evident among poorer students who choose to work and become economically independent for a period of time.

【解析】

· 開頭就是背景鋪墊，同義替換“have a break from studying after graduating from high school”點出核心讨論主題

· It is quite common these days for somebody to do something.

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The reasons for this trend may involve the recognition that a young adult who passes directly from school to university is rather restricted in terms of general knowledge and experience of the world. 對比By contrast, those who have spent some time earning a living or travelling to other places have a broader view of life and better personal resources to draw on. 遞進They tend to be more independent, which is a vert important factor in academic study and research, as well as giving them an advantage in terms of coping with the challenges of student life.

【解析】

· 先分析“利”的一面：間休年能讓學生見識更廣博、擁有更多可利用的個人資源、變得獨立且能應對生活挑戰。

· 對比：by contrast 對比過程中要有側重，避免更重篇幅落在對“直接升學”的讨論上，這部分考官隻用了一句話帶過，約占整段内容的1/3。

· recognition 認知 = understanding (n.)

have a broader view of life 拓寬人生視野

draw on personal resources 利用個人資源

cope with the challenges of life 應對人生挑戰

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However, there are certainly dangers in taking time off at that important age. 分析觀點 Young adults may end up never returning to their studies or finding it difficult to readapt to an academic environment. They may think that it is better to continue in a particular job, or to do something completely different from a university course. 駁斥But overall, I think this is less likely today, when academic qualifications are essential for getting a reasonable career.

【解析】

· 壓後分析“弊”的一面：中心句點出段落讨論核心“dangers”，再續以論證分析學生們可能不會回去學習或無法适應學習環境。

· 立場是利大于弊，因此本段還給出了必要的駁斥：學曆相當關鍵，所以學生不大可能放棄學業。

· take time off 休假

end up doing something 到頭來...

academic qualifications 學曆

get a reasonable career 找到相當不錯的職業

Conclusion

My view is that young people should be encouraged to broaden their horizons. That is the best way for them to get a clear perspective of what they are hoping to do with their lives and why. Students with such a perspective are usually the most effective and motivated ones and taking a year off may be the best way to gain this.

【解析】

· 結尾總結上文的同時表态“利大于弊”，本部分要求清晰且不重複主體的措辭

· broaden one’s horizon 拓寬視野

get a clear perspective of 對…有更清晰的認識

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